English Composition 1
Sample ENG 1001 Persuasive Essay with Sources
The essay below is an example of a persuasive essay that uses supporting material from online sources and that cites and documents the material correctly according to MLA standards.
The essay is not perfect (for example, the writer
could more effectively address the opposing point of view). However, the essay
does illustrate well how to use supporting evidence from sources (both
paraphrases and quotations), how to cite the information from sources, and how
to prepare the Works Cited page. Notice as well the types of sources used in the
essay.
John J. Hinklemeyer The Failure of Abstinence-Only Programs Sex education is important, but many students finish sex education classes
with a distorted view of sexuality and without a good understanding of
contraception and safe-sex practices. Instead, children only learn that they
should not have sex until they are married. Abstinence-only programs in
public schools have become popular because of a law giving millions of
dollars to schools that teach the programs. These programs have the good
intention of persuading young people to wait until marriage before having
sex, but abstinence-only programs are not achieving this goal and are flawed
by the distorted and biased perspective that they promote. In 1996, the United States government passed a law giving funding to states
that offered abstinence-only programs in public schools. Since this time,
over half of a billion dollars has been given to states to promote
abstinence-only programs (Brody). To receive the money, schools must agree
to follow a set of rules. The rules indicate that a school’s abstinence-only
program must have "as its exclusive purpose teaching the social,
psychological, and health gains to be realized by abstaining from sexual
activity" ("Impacts"). Students must be taught that they are likely to
suffer harmful effects if they have sex before marriage. They also must be
taught that the "expected standard" is for school-age children not to engage
in sexual activity and for adults to engage in sexual relations only within
marriage ("Impacts"). Schools receiving the funds must teach students that
they should "just say no" to sex until they are married. The schools are not
allowed to teach students about safe sex and "may not mention contraception
except to point out the failure rates of various methods" (Brody). Some
states have refused the federal funds so that their schools can determine
their own ways to teach sex education, but 43 states participate in the
program. With millions of dollars from the government every year, many
schools now promote abstinence. They offer abstinence-only programs with
encouraging titles such as "ReCapturing the Vision," "Teens in Control," and
"My Choice, My Future!" ("Impacts"). They encourage students to sign
virginity pledges vowing not to have sex until marriage, to proudly wear
their "purity rings," and to carry their ATM ("abstinence till marriage")
cards (Kelly). These programs encourage students to develop a strong sense
of self and to avoid the negative consequences that might result from sexual
activity, but there is a problem: abstinence-only programs do not work.
Studies show that abstinence-only programs do not reduce sexual activity by
young people. In 2007, the United States Department of Health and Human
Services released a study of abstinence programs. This government-funded
study involved more than 2000 students. The authors discovered that
"findings from this study provide no evidence that abstinence programs
implemented in upper elementary and middle schools are effective at reducing the rate of
teen sexual activity several years later" ("Impacts"). The authors concluded that
"youth in the [abstinence-only] programs were no more likely to abstain from
sex" than students not in the programs ("Impacts").
In addition, "among those who reported having had sex, program and
control group youth had similar numbers of sexual partners and had initiated
sex at the same mean age"
("Impacts"). Apparently, students did not benefit from all of the effort and
the millions of dollars that have gone into these programs. Another study by
Peter Bearman of Columbia University shows that "88 percent of middle and
high schoolers who pledge to stay virgins until marriage end up having
premarital sex anyway" (Kelly). He adds that "the bad news is that they are
less likely to use contraception the first time they have intercourse"
(Kelly). Dr. S. Paige Hertweck, a doctor who contributed to an American
Academy of Pediatrics report on teen sexual activity, states that "teaching
abstinence but not birth control makes it more likely that once teenagers
initiate sexual activity they will have unsafe sex and contract sexually
transmitted diseases" (Preschel). In abstinence-only
programs, students are taught to "just say no" to sex. They are not taught
the information that they need to know about safe sex and contraception if
they later choose to say "yes," as many of them are doing. Abstinence-only programs also promote a distorted and biased view of
sexuality. To receive funding, schools must follow the rules in the law for
teaching abstinence-only programs. One of the rules is that students must be
taught that the "expected standard of sexual activity" is a "monogamous
relationship in the context of marriage" ("Impacts"). An estimated 88 to 99
percent of Americans have sex outside of marriage ("Many Who Pledge"), yet
students must be taught that having sex only within marriage is "the
expected standard." The rules also require that students be taught that
having sex outside of marriage "is likely to have harmful psychological and
physical effects" ("Impacts"). Approximately nine out of ten Americans have
sexual relations outside of marriage. Do most of them suffer "harmful
psychological and physical effects," as the government has determined that
students must be taught? The law presents a distorted view of sexuality,
along with a biased view. In 2006, the government updated the funding
guidelines to state that, in abstinence-only programs, marriage is defined
as a legal union between a man and a woman as husband and wife, "which
advocates worry will further alienate gay, lesbian, bisexual and transgender
adolescents and shape an education program that dismisses the sexual health
concerns of those teens" ("New Abstinence-Only Guidelines"). All students should benefit
from sex education programs. Student Hunter Kincaid suggests how
abstinence-only programs discriminate against gays and lesbians: "'As a gay
student, I thought [the abstinence-only class] was ridiculous,' he says.
'Abstinence until marriage for people who can’t even get married'" (Kelly).
A sex-education program should help all students make good decisions about
sexual activity. It should not promote an unrealistic standard of behavior,
should not promote a particular definition of marriage, and should not
discriminate against some students. Sexual activity by young people is an important concern. In an ideal world,
maybe everyone would wait until marriage before having sex and would then
remain in a single, monogamous relationship. But this is not the reality. It
might be a good goal to try to convince young people to wait until marriage
before having sex, but taking this approach alone to sex education is not
working. After ten years and a half of a billion dollars in federal funding,
abstinence-only programs have not had a positive impact on the sexual
behavior of teenagers. The programs may even cause harm because of the
distorted and biased views that they promote and because of the information
about safe sex and contraception that they do not teach. It is time to put
an end to abstinence-only programs and to give students more comprehensive
sex-education programs that better prepare them for the future.
Works Cited Brody, Jane E. "Abstinence-Only:
Does it Work?"
New York Times, 1 June 2004,
www.nytimes.com/2004/06/01/health/personal-health-abstinence-only-does-it-work.html. "Impacts of Four Title V, Section
510 Abstinence Education Programs." Office of the Assistant Secretary
for Planning and Evaluation, U.S. Department of Health and Human Services,
13 April 2007,
https://aspe.hhs.gov/basic-report/impacts-four-title-v-section-510-abstinence-education-programs. Kelly, Katy. "Just Don't Do It!" U.S. News & World Report, 17 Oct. 2005,
pp. 44-51. Academic Search Complete,
http://ezproxy.ivcc.edu:2048/login?url=http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=a9h&AN=18516558&site=ehost-live. "Many Who Pledge Abstinence at Risk
for STDs: Study: Teens Who Remain Virgins More Likely to Take Other Chances."
NBC News, 15 Mar. 2005,
http://www.nbcnews.com/id/7232643/ns/health-sexual_health/t/many-who-pledge-abstinence-risk-stds/#.WAjNrYWcGUk. "New Abstinence-Only
Guidelines, Funding Increase Denounced." Nation's Health, vol. 36,
no. 3, April 2006, p. 7. MasterFile Premier,
http://ezproxy.ivcc.edu:2048/login?url=http://
search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=f5h&AN=21372967&site=ehost-live. Preschel, Jill. "Docs
Pan Abstience-Only Sex Ed." CBS News, 5 July 2005,
www.cbsnews.com/news/docs-pan-abstinence-only-sex-ed/.
Professor Jones
ENG 1001-09
4 October 2020
Copyright Randy Rambo, 2020.